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Jack Frost X Reader Part Four
Story by lilacgiraffe
You guys know the drill; read the discription. There’s important stuff for you guys there!

When you woke up, you were in a warm bed, covered in fur blankets. You snuggle deeper into the blankets and close your eyes. “Wait, wait,” you mutter, opening your eyes, “this isn’t right.” You sit up in the bed. Looking around, you notice the bright reds and golds in the room. “Seriously?” you groan, flinging the covers off of you and throw your legs over the side, “I have some random guy in my house that can make it snow and then I get kidnapped? Oh, not to mention the sexual harassment and the teasing.” you mutter, “You know, my mother always told me not to let strangers into your house but no...” you walk towards the door, “I had to let a freaking magical being into my home!” you grunt, trying to pull the door open. “And... the doors locked,” you put your back against the door, “can this get any worse?” you shout to the ceiling as the lights go off.

“Are you freaking kidding me?” you shout in response, sliding to the floor, “That wasn’t a challenge.” you sob.

“(Y/n)?” a Russian accented voice calls out. You freeze, just wanting whoever it is to leave you alone. You hear the door unlock and you crawl away from the door, huddling against the bed. The door opens and you squeeze your eyes shut.

“There you are,” a familiar voice says softly. Footsteps towards where you sit. You peak from under your bangs were a little gold man is looking at you kindly. His soft glow comforts you and you relax your muscles. Very slowly, the little man hugs you. Though you normally shy away from hugging strangers, this one made you feel very warm, like a teddy bear.

“He’s trying to say sorry.” Jack whispers.

You push the gold man slightly away, “Sorry for what?”

Then, there was the shape of you sleeping made of gold dust above his head. “He’s the Sandman.” the Russian voice says. You look in the gold eyes of the Sandman.

“It’s ok.” you smile and he grins back, giving you a tight, quick hug and walking back towards where Jack and an odd assortment of people were. “Uh...” you look around at the people. A tall, white-bearded man in a large red coat and a fur hat, a woman that looks like a hummingbird, and a rather large rabbit. “Where am I?”

The man in the red coat stepped forward. “You’re in the North Pole.” he chuckles, “I am North or ‘Santa Claus’, to you, this,” he touches the angry rabbit, “is the Easter Bunny,”

“Call me ‘Bunnymund’.” he says in an Australian accent.

“This is the Tooth Fairy,” the hummingbird woman nods politely. “And you know Jack and Sandman.” North chuckles.

“Um,” Tooth blushes and you look at her, “I just wanted to say that,” she stumbles over her words, “your teeth were always beautiful.”

“Oh!” you blush as well, “Thank you.”

“Well,” Jack yawns, “time to go.” he picks you up and throws you over his shoulder, causing you to protest, “It was nice to see you guys again but next time, don’t kidnap my girlfriend. As Jack shoves past the group of people in the doorway, you’re snatched from him by the bunny.

“Jack,” North scolds as Bunnymund holds you tightly to his soft chest, “we need you to help us.” You feel your eyes begin to slide shut again and you try to fight it, failing miserably.

Bunnymund feels you slump against you and he walks you over to the bed. “You were so good at egg hunts as a little girl,” he murmurs, tucking you in, “but you always re-hid my eggs in easier places for the younger children.” he kisses your forehead, “Such a nice little girl,” he says a little louder, “and she’s stuck with you.” he said bitterly at Jack.

“What do you mean, ‘stuck with’? She chose to let me in!” Jack objected.

“Because she’s compassionate.” North said under his breath. “As a girl, she always shared her presents and made presents for me.” he smiles, “Actually, even though she doesn’t put up a tree for me, every Christmas she leaves a present for me and carrots for the reindeer.” He looks at Jack with fire in his eyes, “She would leave cocoa for you on the first day of winter! This girl would make a better guardian than you!”

“Is that so?” Jack yells back, ice clashing with fire. Tooth and Sandy backed towards you, wanting to stay out of it. Trying to protect you, Sandman gives you a dream of everything you ever wanted.

“Bunny!” Tooth calls out, getting the Aussie's attention, “Get her out of here.” she shouted above the war between Jack and North. Bunnymund nods, grabbing you and pounding his foot to the ground, getting the attention from North but not Jack. As the portal closes, North smirks.

“Looks like your girl left.” he says, walking out of the room, leaving Jack to run to the empty bed. Slowly, the other two in the room walk out

To the Bunny!!

Bunnymund places you in your bed. "I'll miss you, (Y/n). Sweet dreams." he whispers, leaving to go back to join the Guardians. When he left, an evil chuckle escaped from the shadows.

Yay! A new part! This is getting fun! You're in danger!
I told you guys it would be up today.
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uvray12 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Student Digital Artist
ILYSM Bunny! *hugs bunny*
Bunny: not to worry mate *hugs back*
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha
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uvray12 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Student Digital Artist
XD
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Ocbooyah Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Student General Artist
Danger? Again? Why is it every FF that pairs you with a Guardian ends up with Pitch kidnapping you because he's jealous? Either way, What is next?!
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Keep reading~
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ClaraGryffon Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Whoa, what happened to Jack?!
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:iconlilacgiraffe:
lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
//shrug
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kalliat Featured By Owner May 1, 2013  Student General Artist
Good old Bunny!
UwU
It's nice talking to a fellow Aussie.
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner May 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha
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ja-c25 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
darn, in danger again?? Every fan fic, I'm in danger..... Oh well *goes to garage and pulls a shot gun from a safe* COME AT ME!!!! >:3

lol, loving the story, by the way! ^^
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Lovergirlnice Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013   Artist
u made me laugh u just made my day:D
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ja-c25 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lol I'm glad! I don't usually make ppl laugh ^^
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Lovergirlnice Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013   Artist
well now u did ^.^
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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ja-c25 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome :3
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kibby99 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
To the Bunny!! LOL
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, it's what I though of!
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kibby99 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
To da Bunny-buns!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
would've made me tear up with laughter
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Snowflake316 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
:D :D :D
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Snowflake316 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
Amaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaazing!!!!!!!!!!!
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank yOOOOOOOoooOOooOoooooOoOOOOO~u
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Snowflake316 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013
XD
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Isamu-Sugai Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
As a writer and a passionate reader, I feel I need to say something. This story(if you can even call it that) needs a major overhaul. There's no plot, no character development, the characters (especially Jack) are so OOC it seems like their personalities almost don't exist, and the speed of which the events are happening are way too fast and random.

Jack-You did the impossible, you made me hate him. I'll be honest I've read a handful of JackX readers and the author are usually hit or miss when it comes to Jack's personality but usually by the second part or two, the author corrects themselves.

Your writing on the other hand, has not improved since part one. In fact it seems to be getting worse.

You did say back in part one you haven't seen the movie yet, so my question to you is; why did you decide to write this if you haven't seen the movie yet? If you don't know the material you're writing about then how do you expect to do good? All you end up doing is sending yourself up to fail.

As a fan fiction writer myself, I know it's necessary to sometimes alter the personality of the character(s) slightly so that he or she fits in your story better but it's a completely different thing to make the character almost unrecognizable.

Okay, I'm done criticizing. Let me move on to giving advice.

1. Plot development is a must for any writing but especially for this writing since the chapters or parts are so short. You had reader meets Jack, gets kidnapped, soon to be in danger-that's what happened so far in a nutshell. There's no room in there for the reader to emerge themselves in the writing.

2. Character development-is a must no matter the length of a story. Without it, readers will have a hard time feeling emotion for a character when something happy, sad, bad, etc does happen to them. Character development is also important between the character themselves. Jack has fallen for the reader but there's no reason why. This doesn't work in real life and neither in written work.

3. Passion: If you don't have passion for what you're writing then chances are readers won't have passion reading your writing. To me you threw this together in a rush and not really caring if it was good or not.

4. Read over what you have written: Sometimes what sounds good in your head doesn't always sound good on paper. It's also good to have someone else read it out loud to you. This way you can catch mistakes you might have missed while reading it yourself. Also, if you find yourself disappointed while listening then that's a clear hint you should go back and fix some things.

Closing statement:

I know what I wrote may come off as hurtful but trust me, that wasn't my intention. I took the time to write all of this to help not hurt so, hopefully you understand. As a fellow writer I can see the potential hidden within your work so, I urge you to keep practicing on your writing skills and keep in mind what I said.
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
When I first saw this message, I was a bit frightened. I understand that you didn't mean to come off as hurtful but I hope you understand it hurts all the same.
Now, about what you had to say:
I wrote the first part because I had read some of the fanfictions and I liked the character so I wanted to write a short one myself. Then, people kept asking for more. I did what I could with trying to give the story some more body with what little I knew of the character and when I was writing these parts (2-7, I believe) not only was I out of the medication that helps me focus but I was also hitting a very rough patch with my girlfriend. I hate seeing my readers unhappy so I took a little break and then got back to writing the story that they wanted to most. I'm sorry if I made you had Jack, I really am, and though I'm trying to improve my writing style you have to understand that I am a) a freshman in high school and am trying to post on a schedule as well as stay on top of classes and sports and b) a depressed teen who is currently trying to get over a bad breakup. I appreciate to have your feedback and though you may not like how this story is going, others do. So, here's my closing statement; I may sound snippy and like a bitch to you as I write this and I hope you know that wasn't my intention I just come off like that. I'm glad that you got what you were feeling out and though you don't want to offend, you do. I kindly ask you to do the following.
1) stop reading the story if you don't like the development
2) don't treat me like you understand because though you are a writer, I have to deal with a lot of shit right now and I don't really care for your attitude
3) criticize me after reading my journal entries so you know how I'm feeling and lastly,
4) if you don't like how I handled your comment, un-watch me. Though I hate to loose a watcher, I don't like having people watch me if they don't like me.

I'll keep in mind what you said so keep in mind what I say. I may rush to put my works out but I do it sadly. I just want to provide my watchers with a good story even if my day is bad. If you couldn't tell, my feelings reflect onto my writing and I'm never really a passionate person but I love every watcher I have and try to give them what they want. I stop writing a series if people aren't happy with it and I take all advise to heart. Except for this. This looks like it took a long time and I hate to ruin your hard work but I really don't like how you treat my story. To address #2 on your list, many people just fall in love. In part one, Jack sees your passion for snow and in part 2, you show Jack your kind heart. His love also has to do with another matter but that comes up in a later part.
I see you said that you were done criticizing yet it was written all over your 'advise'.
Thank you for the help but, no thank you.
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Mrs89fluffy Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Filmographer
I POST THE NEXT CHAPTER OR I WILL HUNT YOU DOWN, AND MAKE YOU EAT MY FOOT, THEN I WILL MAKE YOU EAT YOUR FOOT, THEN YOU NOSE, THEN YOUR RIGHT THUMB UNTILL YOU POST THE STORY
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
... No! One post a day! Try again tomorrow! :iconevilgrinplz:
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Mrs89fluffy Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Filmographer
NEVER! I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
TOMORROW!! :D
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Mrs89fluffy Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Filmographer
OMG, I WILL BE ONE OF THE FIRST TO READ IT
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I lied and forgot to write it...

Wednesday!
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Mrs89fluffy Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Student Filmographer
U BIG MEANY! :iconnotcoolplz:
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Bleh!
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Soultail Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
but but but what happens next?!!!!! This is great by the way! amazing story!!!!!
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know yet! Find out this weekend during our 100 watcher celebration!
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angeleyes12 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
It's s AWSOME!I loves it.
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yay! Thanks!
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Crystall-92 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hej, when will be next part? I REALLY, TRULY wanna know what will happen next!
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know!
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Crystall-92 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hmm... Ok, I'll be patient
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yay!
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Crystall-92 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:)
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Hetalia1219 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Filmographer
Mmmmmmooooooooorrrrrrrrrreeeeee!!! Your so talented!!
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
There will be! Thank you!
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SonazeShadazelover Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
AWESOME!!!!!
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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SonazeShadazelover Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome!
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SpiritStien111 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
ermigerd!!! this is so good!! am i still on only a sweatshirt and undies??
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lilacgiraffe Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yep! ><
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SpiritStien111 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
ah!!!!!!!!! X3
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